I'm not sure exactly what you want us to critique. The writing style or the subject matter. Anyway, here are my few comments.
I think it failed to make your point. I assume you were advocating...
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I'm not sure exactly what you want us to critique. The writing style or the subject matter. Anyway, here are my few comments.
I think it failed to make your point. I assume you were advocating...